"you tell me you missed me and i almost believed you."... told (past tense)

"and let’s paint these wrists red/from the bleeding."... This image is really cliched, which I think brought down the piece. I definitely think you can do better.

I think the sarcastic tone works really well. It adds a nice sense of humor almost, but also makes a point. I liked this line "poetry is my murder and." That metaphor was really powerful and unique. The rest of the piece is good. It's relateable and definitely would make a point to the person its about.

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Loved the ending. Great work!
Faith

Wow, pretty wild, in a good way. I liked how it started innocent, and then Kablamo! It just errupted into raw passion. I'd tip my hat to you, but im not wearing one, Peace

This is seriously creepy. But that's a good thing :)

I don't know why you have no capitals in here. Ah well, that's up to you, and a lot of people do it this way on fictionpress. I've never liked it, but that's just me.

I like the little bits of rhyming in here. They add a lot to the flow of the piece, but you wouldn't really notice them in there, which is good.

Nice title as well. It's very... yes, creepy. ;-)