I really liked this poem Jill! I love poems that are a bit abstract but still retain amazing imagery. Nice job!

God...
Have you ever watched Def Poetry Jam?
I feel like the rythemn of this is perfect for that. You have such great word choice. I got a little lost in the train of thought, but I don't think I would want to read it any other way. I really really liked this. I think that you are saying something about society covering up the abstract for the concrete. I could totally be off on that haha, and correct me if I am. But that is what I got from this piece.
Nicely done.

Truly,
Twyla