| Reviews for Romeo |
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Mazarine 12/1/12 . chapter 33great story :) |
AJS 7/12/12 . chapter 32Wow. I came into this story expecting a lot less than I received. I actually haven't picked up a FictionPress story in over 6 months so I came into this story expecting a light-hearted story, but came out with so much more. This was a wonderful story, and I definitely appreciated its improvement as the chapters went on. By the end of it, the story had built up into a great story of self-realization and rediscovery. I liked seeing Jules' transformation and her growth, and I liked how it was all very gradual and built-up, not at all abrupt and very natural. It took a while for me to come to terms that Bryan would be the main romantic interest in this story, especially I guess since he seemed so uninterested in the beginning when they first met, which I guess makes sense because when you're in that serious of a relationship, even if he felt some bit of attraction he wouldn't act on it. But I guess what I always realized was the problem between Bryan and Paula was that Bryan wasn't really putting her first. If he was really putting Paula and her happiness first, he wouldn't have been so worried about a long distance relationship or art school – none of that would have mattered if he knew that was what Paula wanted. But he didn't and I guess that's where I realized that there might be some hope for Jules. But I guess a relationship like the one between Jules and Bryan would always make me wonder. How does she know Bryan won't do the same thing to her that he did to Paula? What's to say Bryan will still remember to put her first once his immediate interests are challenged again like they were with Paula and her art school? It obviously takes time and a series of encounters to build up a relationship with a girl before you can decide to leave your long-time girlfriend for her, and Bryan, while he didn't exactly do anything, definitely pursued building up that relationship with Jules long before he broke up with Paula. Maybe I'm even more of a pessimist than Jules is but if I were her I would at least have some questions or doubts. I think there were also parts of the story that could have been more developed, Paula and this idea of "cheating" being one of them. I guess the way Bryan acted when he was around both of them, the fact that she just showed up once and that was it... I'm not sure I guess I feel like that aspect of everything could have been explored more deeply. But I think what really made the story was Jules' growth and transformation. It was great to see her rebuild her relationships and life again, though I don't think it had just to do with Bryan, though he definitely did give her strength with Ayva. Anyway great story, great work. - Alyssa |
Ice Bubble 5/24/12 . chapter 33You know, I'd bet the fish I thought I would get that J would turn out to be Juan. It's funny though because recently I've been thinking I didn't want a fish any more. So perhaps it's a sign hmm? Really really really great story. Obviously well thought out and strategized. *double thumbs up* |
Ice Bubble 5/20/12 . chapter 8I bet the fish I don't yet have that J is for Juan. |
GossamerSilverglow 10/27/11 . chapter 32This was fabulous! I really enjoyed that it was more of a coming of age story too. Most people don't realize that it happens all the time, not just when we're in high school-sometimes it doesn't even happen until way later. I love that it had a happy ending and it seemed to fit that Jules finally decided to call her father after so long. Honestly I'd like to read this meeting between the two. It would be decent one shot. Having Tommy and Jules ending up friends as well was nice. Now all that needs to happen is Ayva and Tommy become friends. I really kind of felt sorry for Jason, he didn't seem like a bad guy, just a little like Jules when she was going through that depression. Thank you so much for taking the time to write this and share it with everyone. I know I appreciated it! -_* I hope you have more stuff for me to read…if not get crackin’ or I guess that would be typin’. Goss |
esinevitable 9/10/11 . chapter 33I love the growth of the character! Cute romance too, not too cliche. Awesome. |
Carlotta Lynn 8/28/11 . chapter 32I absolutely loved this story! I really almost though he was going to end up with Paula. I got a little teary-eyed. But I loved the ending and the epilogue. Thanks for sharing this! Hope to read more from you in the future! |
BubblyChini 8/25/11 . chapter 1I love how Jules finally found her Romeo. It really inspire me that someday I'll also meet and end up my romeo LOL.. Please do continue to write good and uplifting stories :)) |
OrangeXAngel 8/23/11 . chapter 33I know you probably finished this story quite a long time ago, but I still must say that I loved it! I had to read it from start to finish. Your characters are truly relatable and your story was easily one I can see happening in real life. It was very nice to read! |
operaxxdiva 8/17/11 . chapter 33I cried. Of COURSE. The ending - her finally gaining the courage to speak with her father - was astounding. I'm so proud that you avoided the cliche "we're getting married" ending. This ending was real. Solid. Something both believable and touching. As always, INCREDIBLE. And I'm looking forward to falling just as deeply in love with But Dust as I am with this one! |
renegade01 8/17/11 . chapter 32Aww, I can't believe its over. I liked the ending. I kinda wanted to find out more about her dad, but it worked out. Jules has come such a long way since the beginning. Congrats on finishing. ;) Jules finally found her Romeo... |
operaxxdiva 8/16/11 . chapter 31Oh my lord. The perfect ending. PERFECT. This story was truly a mixture of romance, and family, and friendship, and overcoming insecurities. Just a truly MAGNIFICENT story. It wasn't your run-of-the-mill teen romance and I THANK YOU for that. Your characters came to life. I grew to care for Jules and Andy and Brian and Avya. They were more than just fictional entities - while reading your story, they became FRIENDS. As if I knew them myself. And that's all thanks to your beautiful writing. Without your writing, the characters would have been empty. But they beautifully flawed and real. And I wanted to thank you from the bottom my heart for providing us all with an ending chapter that has lifted my heart! You are a true writer. Please, please, please get a book published one day. I guarantee you that I will be an avid reader and fan. |
Scorpiongurl324 8/10/11 . chapter 31OMG! Great chapter! I was hoping for that to happen, but knowing u I wasn't sure if I was going to get wat I wanted, lolz! UPDATE SOON! -Kia |
WishBlade 8/7/11 . chapter 31Ah, how I love happy endings ] I know I would've been satisfied even if she didn't get Bryan because your story was so brilliantly written, but she did get him, and I'm so incredibly happy about it! Loved the chapter! |
AudreyKW 8/7/11 . chapter 31OH SUNS AND STARS THIS IS AMAZING. I honestly wasn't sure how the relationship between these two would pan out and weather you were an evil author or not. you literally had me on edge throughout this entire story. So fantastic. I will recommend to the world. :) |