that was fucking fantastic!

This is extremely good, and yeah, easy to relate to.

Devon and I think you're perfect though? :)

Lovely. I can totally relate.

Oh, God. This poem is scarily easy to relate to. I think we all know someone like that...highly hypocritical, acts holier than thou, and in the end is just a really terrible person.

Either way, you did a fantastic job with this, and I like your style a lot.

Rage sahould be a genre. The format is awesome and word coice is fantastic. It flows well. Keep it up!

"and someday, that fucking
halo’s just going to get caught
on your pretty little head and
squeeze the life
right out of you."

BAM! This part is so hard-hitting! VERY POWERFUL! Great job! :D

Word Choice: The word choice was good and consistent. I could really feel the spite in the speaker's voice. You used carefully chosen words to convey anger.

Subject: The subject isn't too original. What's worse is that the way you chose to execute it was pretty cut and dry. Why not try to use more technique to show the reader her jealousy and anger rather than tell it. For example, use metaphors and specific imagery.

Word play: The word choice was consistent, and it read well. I liked the use of sarcasm the fifth stanza. It really spoke volumes about the speakers character.

Enjoyment: I didn't really enjoy this poem. There wasn't anything that popped out to me. It would have been a little better if you had used some more imagery, and shown rather than told,

Oh my god, I love this. It's so powerful! Especially the ending. I can just feel the emotion dripping from the words. Great work! Love it-t-t-t (:
Faith

whoa. I felt the anger in that. nice imaginary.