great story! I love the lyrics of the song you placed in the story. it gives a certain atmosphere...and the song you used have adorable lyrics :3“

"And when I ask you to hold me tight,

I beg you to make it be all night…"

Kawaii!

LOL CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT.

Anyway, I'm making comments as I go along so I won't seem so scatter-brained. XD

I suggest you don't introduce the characters' full names extremely early in the story. It makes it sound like a documentary. Let your readers get used to the characters first. (This might be a little hard considering how short this thing actually is. xD)

grew even more red 'grew even redder'

Overall, you could put a little more narrative into it because I, as a reader, don't really feel Jasmine's feelings. It's like 'Oh, she likes Isabela. Okay...' Put more flowery stuff down to let the reader delve into the characters' minds to get a better feel of what they're reading.

You did subtle foreshadowing in the first part which was good but you could make it a little more obvious (or maybe I'm just dense...?). ;)

WHEE CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT END.