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a silenced revolution 2009-03-30 . chapter 1
"and your brown eyes are the
summertime,
but I never really felt that attached to the season,"

golden lines!

the only thing i didn't like was your spelling of "friends": freinds. it just looks pretty odd, especially since it's in bold. still not a big deal. nice piece.
no.peace.los.angeles 2009-03-13 . chapter 1
Nice. I can feel the angst in this, for sure. I like the "hiding in the curve of the streets" line. Very appropriate. You spelled "friends" wrong, though. Minor detail. A nice poem. Keep writing! :)
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