|Reviews for Umbrella|
| Kate Marshall 3/22/09 . chapter 1
Are you talking about rain? I can't figure out who the poem is adressed to. I'd like it more if it was clearer.
Some single-spaced stanzas would be pretty in this. The double-spaces look bland in comparison to your descriptions. (Hold shift while pressing enter or backspace to single-space up or down.)
And I love the descriptions. "pulsing through the leaves", "rushing into your hands"- that's gorgeous. Especially the ending:
Short and sweet
A raindrop on your breath.
I like that short, quick, kind of staccato rhythm to it. It has its charm. I though it was a good ending to your short, rain-themed poem.
-Katie, from the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)