haha I like the ending. It was like me and steph on saturday (her bike had two flats and we were filling it up all by ourselves! :P). Go girls! :P:P

Honestly, I'd like to see whether brendon stays like the "nice boy" or whether he changes back to his old self (that he'd put up to other girls).
It does feel complete (unlike what you gave me in school! :P) and I really enjoy it.
The beginning you're still shaky with that exactly you want to write and exactly where you're going (don't say yes, because you're writing doesn't lie, unless somebody around here). Which is why you have the exclamation points. If you look towards the end of the story once you know what you want and where you want to go (exactly), then you dont have any exclamation points (except in quotes, and thats fine).
Over all though, great story! NOW REVIEW MY STORIES OR FACE THE CONCIQUENCES OF A PISSED OFF FLUTE PLAYER WITH A PICCOLO AND FLUTE!!

i think your story has some great potential
so please post more soon!
=)