Oh wow! That's awesome! I especially love the third to last stanza. Great imagery and expression of emotion. I love it! I love the metaphors and comparisons.

This was very nicely done, especially the last stanza.

Great piece, depressing, but beautifully written

"In a pagan sort of dance." This reference made me happy, especially since Ostara is this week. :)

"Stuck...in this ghetto." CHILLING! Great imagery!

"Burned rubber in my lungs." There's such a sharp tone here. Wow!

"Trash flows past." Excellent mingling of comedy and tragedy here.