wow, i just read the first chapter and it was really cool i can't wait till the next one, it looks really good.

I heard about this on . I was wondering if you could also post future chapters on that site as well. If you cant, oh well. I really hope you update this soon cause I love this chapter already. I look forward to what happens to those boys. Hope they somehow come through.
Please update soon!

Sad!

great! really, and so well-written. I'm already sucked, can't wait for more :D

Great start!

it has potential.
i like it so far.
cant wait to see where your going with this =D

It's... definately refreshing to see a story about incest that seems like it will be about more than just sex but... well I plan to make my living off writing so it may seem like nitpicking but...

“We know you’ll need time.” Their mother responded, her tone intended to be soothing and calm - but the boys’ hearts quickened at it.

EHH. WRONG.

Badly formatted dialogue is one of my pet-peeves. That should go:

“We know you’ll need time,” their mother responded, her tone intended to be soothing and calm - but the boys’ hearts quickened at it.

Comma replaces a period if there would've been one, and the dialogue tag does NOT begin with a capital letter unless you start it with a proper noun.

It's not just you, I mean but... I honestly don't see why so many people format dialogue like that. I've never seen a professionally published story that formats dialogue like that. And I'm really getting tired of it -_-