HOLLA.

'Grats on finding a bet - especially such a gloriously awesome-tastic one. Here's to hoping she whips you into shape so you actually finish this story, mkay? Speaking of the story: Neely's room was really interesting (I love the idea of her drawing her own world!) and I'm supah curious what's going to happen with the wish and Dresden's role as a villian/hero. I kindasorta hated when...I failed at thinking of anything I didn't like though. Also, you should know, every chapter I find myself wondering about (and loving) Dresden more.

Go update fast nao, kk?
Kaye

Hm, isn't the title of your story a band name? Don't they have copyright over it?

HOLLA.

'Grats on finding a beta - especially such a gloriously awesome-tastic one. Here's to hoping she whips you into shape so you actually finish this story, mkay? Speaking of the story: Neely's room was really (Cool. I liked how they climbed the tree.) and I'm supah curious about what's going to happen with (Neely's wish.). I kindasorta hated when (I want more romance!) though. Also, you should know, every chapter I (Love.) Dresden more.

Go update fast nao, kk?
(Sarah)

This. Was. Gorgeous.

From the very beginning, I loved the poetic prose, and the way it felt like a boat ride in itself, swaying from side to side...not sing-songy, but it had some sort of sorrowful, serene cadence to it.

I absolutely love it. You're magnificent.

Jules

Hai der bbcakes,

U r rlly bringin teh WOMPWOMPWOMP and teh NTZNTZNTZ wit ur epic updatin skill0rz, y/y? U make mi want 2 fluta mai oilashz at u all alooring liek — ur bein all fast bcause u fansy mi, ya? Mai k3yb0ard ttly explod'd wit teh awesomesauce when the willow tree came to life! But u made mi make wit tha OMGOMGOMG FAIL when u no! This story is so cool - there wasn't anything I didn't like! and mai 'INORITE?' bcame n 'IDUNNORITE?' Gt bk 2 tha bidnezz! R0mance ficz r 2 b suave and senzuwal, trufax. AKA: no moar tiem 4 srs emo noiz!

Kthnx, bai!1!!11!
Evvie

Yo homie!

Your updating skillz are wicked rad this time around, I'm digging the Speedy Gonzales thing you've got going on. Dresden's all kinds of woah I wanna know more this chapter. I also thought the part when he felt up her spine happened was off the hook. Nothing! was whack though, I'ma put the beat down on you if you keep that up, fo' shizzel fo' sho.

Word to your mother,
Evvie

To the weird writer behind the FictionPress screen—

You're story was quite interesting. I enjoyed the part where the fish helped Neely, but think you need to work on having more of the guy from the lake! I hope you're better about updating than you have been recently, as the ridiculously long wait for your last update on a story was enough to make your readers shun you. In any case, I think Neely is kind of weird, but cool and that boy she 'saved' was really intriguing.

Sparkles, unicorns and best regards,

Evvie

Well, I feel awfully special(: HAHA. Yay, another update!(= Ohgod, Dresden is such a mysterious character; I like him even more! ;D

The Willow's interference was definitely unexpected and brought personification to a whole other level. I'm curious, can anyone else see Dresden or no? I'm guessing that the Willow can feel his presence & so can animals (i.e the fish), but humans don't take notice of him at all (the couples on the boats) unless he wants them to see him. Yeah? Anyway, I wonder what those branches mean. Maybe his own "Ticket to Happiness"?

Eww, I ask way too many questions. Hmph. Can't wait until the next chapter!(=

I really like your story but your pre made review was so funny.your story is amazing the writtng style is beautiful!

Okay, I thought this chapter was flawless. If you ever want to gauge between too much detail vs. not enough again, just refer to chapter three.

I thoroughly enjoyed Dresden's determination to stop Neely from disappearing. Her heartstrings were definitely not the only ones being tugged.

And the whole Willow helping Dresden? Brilliant. I love how you literally bring inanimate objects to life -- it adds a kind of artistic merit to the story.

Yeah, I'm done praising you for now hahaha
Update as soon as you can :)

Musickk Darling

Yo homie!

Your updating skillz are wicked rad this time around, I'm digging the Speedy Gonzales thing you've got going on. Dresden's all kinds of mystery & stoic-y goodness this chapter. I also thought the part when Neily declared her wish was off the hook. Her father seems whack though, I'ma put the beat down on you if you keep that up, fo' shizzel fo' sho.

Word to your mother,
haleyy .

PS: Your capitalization in dialogue is sort of inconsistent.

For instance:
"...his amusement ringing in her ears, "stay?" "
It should be:
"...his amusement ringing in her ears, "Stay?" "

I mean, it's not done often, but it does distract the reader from a beautiful story.

PPS: I've been hooked from the very first author's note. Keep it up!(= (& I think you spelled Neily wrong on your homepage. Just thought you should know, don't stone me!)

Oh, this is beautiful. I don't read a lot of fiction, fantasy especially, but I'm really glad I read this. It's like a surreal poem, but expanded into prose and a story. I love it. Really. All the images are so strange, but incredibly vivid, and yeah. I'm a sucker for this kind of thing. Gorgeous, gorgeous. Keep writing! :)

Wow.

You're writing style leaves me breathless. It's very beautiful. You have a way with syntax and diction that is absolutely mesmerizing. The stucture is also very pleasing to the eyes (as opposed to writers that like to write page-long paragraphs).

Characters are truly captivating, as well. Although I cannot wait to learn more about Dresden and Neily.

My only criticism? Sometimes you went so in-depth with the detail that I skipped over it. It was rare, but it happened. I did that mainly in the first chapter with certain tid-bits about the lake. I was impatient haha so sorry for that.

I'm very interested to see what will happen next in this abstract world. Keep up with the speedy updates :)

Yo homie!

Your updating skillz are wicked rad this time around, I'm digging the Speedy Gonzales thing you've got going on. Dresden's all kinds of hot-diggity-doggy in this chapter. I also thought the part when the wish happened was off the hook. The whole spine alignment was whack though, I'ma put the beat down on you if you keep that up, fo' shizzel fo' sho.

Word to your mother,
Riley

P.S. wow...gangsta'. haha. the whole "word to your mother" has me laughing cuz everytime we have a test, my spanish teacher says "Peace Out. Word to your mother. And as long as there are tests in school there shall be prayer" or something to the effect. :) Muy bueno :) (Very good). And HOT DIGGITY YOU UPDATED! lol. (i hate that word...lol) One-way ticket to happiness...if only the rest of us good get that

To the weird writer behind the FictionPress screen-
Your story was quite interesting. I enjoyed the part where Neily jumped into the water to save the boy even though she couldn't swim so the fish helped her, but I thinnk you need to work on grammar because you seem to be making easy mistakes like typing "you're" instead of "your" or forgetting quotation marks. I hope you're better about updating than you have been recently, as the ridiculously long wait for your last update on a story was enough to make your readers shun you (Yes, because mine wasn't. sure). In any case, I think Neily is kind of intruging and that the boy she 'saved' was hopefully, actually real and not a fragment of the imagination.
Sparkles, unicorns, and best regards,
Riley