So true. I like this(:

This was really good.

It sounded like the person was wanting to kill themself, but they hinted around it. They didn't just say it.

I really liked this(:

Woah, deep. Very awesome!

The poem brought together two well known things, a common phrase and emotion, that would normally not be expected to suit but in this style and setting, they go together really well. This is a feeling I have often experienced and you have put it into words extremely well. There's no complicated language, just short, simple and really effective. It's hard to believe you've only been writing for a short time, you seem to have a talent for this.

Aww:( Sad, but beautifully written. I love the repetition. It really helps drive your point home and makes it flow. Great job:) Write on!

Beautiful and really sad. Again, I like it.

RosePetal

I like the repetition and the short one-liners. It's an interesting concept. :)

i can feel the bitterness behind the words, depressing, sad, but deep..

Love the comparasions, and the shorts lines, just all the ways of putting "get rid of me" and "this is what I am", it was sad but I really liked it. :D

Rolliepollie44

Brilliant. you say you havent been writing very long. you have to be joking. because boy are you a natural.