I love this story! I can't help but like the way Dot and Eddie are so different and yet, they can still be friends and your style makes this even better! Great job!

Hmm, usually there isnt an icepack, just some disinfectant solution dabbed onto the area to be pierced, a dot marked on it to ensure that that's the right location on the ear that the customer wants to get pierced, then a gun to pierce it. Unless its on cartilage parts of the ear, a needle is needed rather than a gun. And before that, they use a clamp to hold it then insert the needle, then slide in the earring. :)
I agree, earrings CAN be conforming. But they can also not be. I try not to view life as keeping away from conforming, but just doing what I like, whether it is considered conforming or not. I find most things I do isn't conforming anyway :P

ARGH! Dot's narrative parts are so short compared to Eddie's! I'm hetero so I'm much more into Dot's POV, since I can relate to it more. I mean with Eddie, the way you portray his story is fine but I guess it depends on the reader being able to connect with the characters.

Dot and Ollie? Hehe..>

This chapter is to hilaariouss! HAHA, captured the moments just right. The dictation used were just right too :D

I think you need to edit, like the spelling and when a new person speaks, it needs to be a new line.

:p Good job

LOL! I'm not a slash fan, not cos i got sthing against it either. The last scene was funny tho, what with the icecream splat and Anwar being so forward haha! I guess that's boys for ya when they don't have to worry about the fussy sensitive feelings of girls :P The ending gave a nice touch to the chap too, like diff pace. Cos usually chaps drone on then the next chap is all drama, which is too inconsistent. Whereas its much nicer if the pace WITHIN a chap is sometimes slow, sometimes fast.

Okay, so I registered with fictionpress just so I could tell you that I'm totally loving this series!

Among the things I like;
1) your characters are completely non-stereotyped. And, they are lots of races-- nice, that. You don't let people assume "the white default." That sounds so political, but it really means something to me.

2)Your conversations are excellent.

3) Thank you for letting Oliver stay Oliver! (and also, thank you for letting Goose be Goose, and for giving him a little more depth.)

More later, I hope...

I've just finished you most wonderful story, and I feel so satisfied with the way everything turned out for everyone. My favorite character has to by Dot, cause she always sees life very clearly and doesn't try to cover her emotions just to try to be nice,and she doesn't take ** from anyone. I can't critique your work or anyones,because I think it's an incredibly daunting task to write and have as much talent as you do. You made me laugh so hard I almost fell out of chair,and sometimes I wept a little for some of life's tragedies. I loved all the characters we lost and would love side stories about how they are doing,or in Charlies case what led up to his suicide. On a lighter note I love that Essie changed so much in the five years since he met Dot. I can't wait to read the sequel. Thanks for all the entertainment and keep up the good work. You ROCK !

Shortest chapter EVA!

Oh but anyways. I'm SO reading the next part, you dont even have to ASK that. :D

My favorite part of the story...hmm...I think it's when Dot and Miguel are talking about the boring ceiling and vampire thingys. 8D I'd SO do that.

“Wow. We are so cheesy.”

“So? Cheese tastes good.”

“I agree.”

That's my second favorite part. It's so awesome its not even funny. XD

Alright! So since I finished this part I'm gonna go off to alert/fav/comment/read the next part! YAY FOR MORE PEACHES AND ESSIE! And Dot and Miguel of course.

Oh and I still love Oliver and Griffin. They're so sexy.

xD
** Peaches and Essie freakin' are such clowns. And Oliver is...well I've always sorta had a school girl crush on him. Yes, he's a dick. Yes he's an **. But he's a SEXY dick/**. That makes it perfectly fine. 8D

Dot is god. Man she reminds me of myself in a weird way. I'd probably say something corny like that. Maybe change it a bit. "you make me feel like humping someone while choking another someone and then passing out." xD

Awesome long chapter!

:3
I love long chapters. You wont lose meh as a reviewer~

Gawd. Essie is just too nice for her own good. If I were in his/her shoes I'd throw stuff. And cuss. And yell. And then to something dramatic like collapse on the floor in tears. 8D

Haha...I love Dot and Miguel. At first I'll admit, I was skeptic about Dot having a relationship with anyone..but now it's all ok.

Oh, and that drunk scene thing and the bar/dick one made me choke on Cheez Its. It was made of win!

More tears for this chapter.
Ah Peaches. I expected more...I dunno.. yelling?
And his dad. I expected..more.. "holy ** its you!" or somethin'?
xD
I dunno.

Awesome chapter. I love how Dot is all lost with all the Spanish. That's how I felt when I first started out at school out here. All you hear is this Spanish and you're like, "WTF?!" Ahh L.A. Cant hate it, but ya sure as hell cant love it. xD

PUBLISH IT DAMN YOU!

So that way, I can buy it, and be like, "I KNOW THE WOMAN WHO WROTE THIS! WHAT NOA?!" 8D

Anyhoo.

You made me cry. Picturing Essie and Peaches fighting...god it was just too much! DX

Awesome chapter AS ALWAYS!

Cant wait to finish everything!

WE'RE GETTIN' MARRIED!

Ah man. I loved this chapter. Dot is awesome. I usually dont like characters that feel sorry for themselves all the damn time, but you make it work. Its like the reader is forced to love her, because she has such a vast personality!

Miguel's one sexy nice guy. Although, I still love Peaches more. The scene where Dot said she's gonna bang Peaches if the date didnt work out reminded me of myself. Course, I'd so be the Peaches in the situation. 8D

Awesome chapter all and all. Cant wait to actually finish everything!

:( The airport scene made me cry a little bit.

Poor Eddie. He needs a nice, straight edge relationship. Unfortunately, I doubt that's in his particular hand of cards... Or even in the deck. At all. :/

Anyway, though. I still really like Oliver. Dot amuses me a little, but she's kind of annoying. She's not as bad as the girls who say they're fat and aren't fat, but it's like, okay, you think you're fat, move on with your life. That's about my feelings toward Dot. But I definitely like how much she cares about Eddie, because it makes me feel like nothing completely horrible can happen to him while Dot's looking over him. Oliver, on the other hand, is going to get Eddie into some deep **.

Oliver equals sex. AKA: very, very good.

You know, it's funny, because I normally like the gay guys best-- and don't get me wrong, I do like Eddie. I really, really, really like Eddie. But Oliver is so my favorite, even though he's an **. Like, a really big **. But he's just so... I dunno. I just... like him. And I'm just assuming Oliver's not gay, because that would be weird, but whatever. I could be wrong, I guess. But I doubt it.

This is very interesting. I would like to read more. So I will. Once I finish my homework.