le gasp. cliff hangers. i love the poetry in this, and i'm curious to see a) what's in the bottle, and b) to find out more about "him". he seems beautiful, in an odd sort of way. so please continue. =]

peace.

This is actually pretty good.

You've definitely captured the essence of surprise and mystery. I think you built up the intensity for the "bottle" thing and I was on the edge of my seat ready for a real heartfelt romantic THING from him, but he just whispered, "Forever."

I think, with your writing style, you're capable of something better. It just seemed somewhat anti-climatic to me.

But I do urge you to continue this.

I'm stuck wondering what's so terrible about her mistake of opening the bottle.

With words,
MHR

"&+ is it obvious I haven't named them yet? lol."

LOL. I was like &+? wtf? what kind of face is that? But then it made since after I reread the sentence.


and if you don't write more, I'll cry...seriously, I will. don't doubt me.

Wow, I really like it so far!
I can't wait to see what happens next.
update soon please!
:)