I don't read very many poems but I did like this, it was good, sad, but still good. :)

beautiful, absolutely amazing! really deep, and the rythym isn't bad either... great job! :]

I like the flow and the story in this.

I agree that this felt a little awkward, but the message is nice and you expressed your thoughts very well. Nice work with this piece, I think you did really good witht this.