love the letters spelling life is dead

good poem over all

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"feed me up/ever until the grave/is the way I'll live on?"... Those lines did not really make sense to me. How can you feed someone up? Also, it would be forever, until the grave. Maybe you could say every minute, until the grave or something to keep the e. And I think "is this the way I'll live on" would make more sense.

"dying/everlasting/am I here?/dying"... how can you be dying everlasting? also I don't like the repetition of dying.

I like the idea behind this piece, with the spelling out, but the way you did it didn't really work.

Oh, I understand the bolded letters spell out "Life is dead!" That part was interesting, and I also really liked the poem!

This reminds me of the 'life-feeds-off-of-life' principle. :)

This is creative, and sorta interesting...yep. It's good!