|Reviews for Eleanor|
| The-Golden-Hour 3/28/09 . chapter 1
| East-0f-Eden 3/26/09 . chapter 1
It was very good. You used lots of vivid description. I'm curious why you chose the name Eleanor bc it makes me think of Eleanor Rigby by the Beatles. She like your Eleanor was a lonely woman. She picks up the rice in the church where a wedding has been. Your poem illustrates her despair. I would only make one change to it. "Everyone could see her.
Their heads were turned away,
But they could see her."
I would say "Everyone could see her but no one could see her (then the rest of it) I feel that this change would show that ppl just look at her body and not at her soul. Great poem it really has depth.