Review Marathon (link in my profile)

I didn't like this piece. It's confusing. You start off with an ambiguous place and you never explain it. You switch to a person, which didn't make sense to me.

The italicized part was nice though. Though you switched from someone to you, which seemed a bit odd. Also, in the last stanza I didn't like how you repeated that line. It just didn't seem necessary.

I know you can do better.

"You're in my heart." There's something so sad, yet beautiful, about this line. :)