 scarlet stars 2009-03-27 . chapter 1Oh. Brilliant:
"Duplicitous duality,
Infernal morality.
Tell me what the
Hell we even came here for.
Empty pews,
Discordant hues."
The only thing I would suggest is editing your ending. I don't feel like it did the beginning any justice. I do like the rhetorical question you ask at the end, but otherwise, maybe you could include some more imagery? I love your word choice in the beginning too. |