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Sabeth the Dreamslayer 2009-03-27 . chapter 1
Good poem, I like the way it flows, and the imagery is nifty too :D I did all my best work in school lol. Keep writing.
scarlet stars 2009-03-27 . chapter 1
Oh. Brilliant:
"Duplicitous duality,

Infernal morality.

Tell me what the

Hell we even came here for.

Empty pews,

Discordant hues."

The only thing I would suggest is editing your ending. I don't feel like it did the beginning any justice. I do like the rhetorical question you ask at the end, but otherwise, maybe you could include some more imagery? I love your word choice in the beginning too.
iloveanimecartoons 2009-03-27 . chapter 1
I like this. A good free verse is hard to come by and the questions made me go "Huh. How 'bout that?" Great job, Erik!
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