didnt really get it

Not particularly well written. The dialogue sounds like its passing between 60 year old english teachers, but the story seems to point to children? Also, the spelling spoils it a little bit and the characters are a bit silly

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A staggering number of errors, including "undeads" when "undead" is both plural and singular...

But a good fic, nevertheless.

First off, you have terrible grammar. Second, plot, logic and characterisation were terrible. Third, if an adolecent girl could beat a zombie, why couldn't a grown man? Really, this story is terrible. There was no background information in the first chapter; where did the zombies come from anyway? Why are people STILL going about their lives when there are MINDLESS FLESH EATING BASTARDS out and about? You really need to improve. Oh, and the fact that your chapters are basically nothing but dialog and movements really doesn't help.

its realy good hmm maby u should make part 2 and also wat kindoff girl nam is carl

one word ... EPIC

OMG I love this

This story is so great I can look past the bad (terrible, TERRIBLE) grammar. If this is what it takes for you to write, I don't care! I'll keep reading even if you start writing backwards...eh...sdrawkcab. HAHAHAH!

That was really really really good! so much suspense though...anyways it's really good.

I found... countless grammatical errors within your story plus the description of Quebec city as being a small town.

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Ah.

Too many grammer errors.

It really kills my mind to see all the grammer errors.

I didn't even read four paragraphs cos of this.

And if what the other reviewers say is true, you really need to work on your logic.

Thank you for the Background, that makes a lot more sense. I am still wondering if she is a zombie. Also your English could use some work a lot of your sentences could use some work. And i was still wondering if you could review my book Amazon.

I am very confused with this story. I feel you are moving to fast without explaining anything. How did the zombies start? why are people still going to work if there are zombies? Why aren't they hiding? What happened to Crawls mom? Is Crawl a zombie? If two kids could kill zombies that easy why couldn't the adults like her father? Also there was lots of typos and gramatical errors very distracting. I will keep reading to see if it improves. Hey could you review my story Amazon, it has zombies also. Try reading past the first chapters there are just an introduction to the story.