Aww! I see the inside story in this and its good. I like it!

RosePetal

Killer ending,

It was so perfect the way you put breathing deeply;

and then another action right after it.

I loved that. :D

And I loved the repeated fallings as well, this poem had a really nice flow but yet still was choppy and had good pauses. Lovely. :)

Rolliepollie44

Sweet