I really like the line "If I had looked at you before you crossed the door". That was phrased really well.

Review Marathon (link in my profile)

This piece was kind of confusing. I think you leave too much up to the reader to figure out when you use ... instead of telling the reader what you're talking about. I like the first five stanzas, but then when you switch to "you don't know" I just got really lost and confused.

I did really like "I never realized you were a victim/

of your own thoughts and monsters,"... that was a really great description. I liked the way you phrased this.

"I never realized you were a victim

of your own thoughts and monsters,"

I think alot of people feel like this sometimes, it made me think of suicide, like being trapped in your own head and you can't get out...

. I’m afraid everybody sometimes wants to disappear

I’m afraid everybody sometimes wants to disappear