|Reviews for In the breath of a Another Moment|
| a silenced revolution 6/25/09 . chapter 1
i like the line "I am Living. Am I alive?" because who hasn't felt like this at some time or another? i am not fond of the capitalisation of "Living", though.
overall, this seems a bit jumpled up and disorganised... which is probably what you were essentially trying to evoke, i realise, because it's a common way of experiencing life, but i guess it just feels more like a journal entry than a poem to me.
these are definitely interesting thoughts though.