It's a neat idea to tie specific causes into your poems, such as you do here as well as in your other poem "Shot". Poetry is all about telling a story and standing up for something you believe in. I hope that in time, it comes more naturally. This poem and your other are very well written, but there is a certian element missing ... it's hard for me to explain but I hope you kind of understand what I mean. Nice work and keep writing! k.

This is really good. It's really the sad truth. But somehow its really good even though its about something so horrid.It's really sad that people can think like this.