it was very well written and creative, i love uniqueness in a poem...

but i think it flowed funny.

uneven i guess...

This was so cute! :D

My favorite line: "Your [kinetic] energy

is contagious;"; it's so clever, and yet not too intricate, which makes it smile-worthy.

Maybe you could change the title to something snappier and more eye-catching? Also, why is "work" bolded?

"You're a jewel [Joule]" could be pronounced as an actual name. And I really giggled. I love that. :)

Effervescent-Sentiments

"Your kinetic energy." Oh, nice diction and imagery!

that was wicked! [awesome]