Gorgeous, just gorgeous.

"She wouldn't even close her eyes because that would be like forgetting."

It doesn't get much better than that.

wow this is just breath taking!

pretty and devasting

I love the line "There was poetry in that smile." It's got such a great ring to it!
And the image of the candlelight in the wax is especially effective. :)

"She wouldn't even close her eyes because that would be like forgetting." PROFOUND! :D

aw that's really sweet. i like the diction of this poem. nice work.

your words are beautiful. thats all i have to say.

Bah, sorry for the favorite-unfavorite--I've done this so many times; when will I learn that the review button is no longer there? Sorry!

Anyway, I really love this--her sweet yearning, his sadistic temptation and how this juxtaposition culminates in a sexual situation. The progression to the last two lines is beautiful and bittersweet, and I love love love endings that turn the reader on his/her head, like this one.

marie

Oh, this is pretty. In a really dirty way. Get what I'm saying? I'm sure you do. It's gritty, but beautiful. Like black & white pictures of scene kids or something. I'm so not like that at all, but I love scene art. Anyway. Love the last two lines. Sad, but beautiful. Keep writing! :)