This message is a follow-up question to my earlier review. I'm sending this message to both Michael and Jave Harron.

Do the both of you guys think it is creatively feasible to write a Indiana Jones-style pulp story wherein a 20th century archaeologist discovers a buried spacecraft?
I'm thinking that the best time to set this fic is the late 50s or early 60s right smack in the middle of the cold war?
What do you think?
Does the story have merit?
I know it's been done before,however it may be possible to repackage the story into something new?
Perhaps with a very tense political background like the Cuban Missile crisis of the Kennedy years.
Just humor me, try and entertain the idea, experiment with it in your head if it can be made into a workable plot.


All I'm asking is your
collective opinion.

Hey, wazzup? Remember me? Man, I totally forgot all about this story! Chapter 2 is just as talented as the first one. Fast paced and interesting, you've got yourself another winner here.

This is very well-written, and got me hooked right away. Your writing is so visual I could see the scene unfold before my eyes.
I really envy you your imagination: this mix of history and science-fiction is an amazing idea, and you develop it wonderfully well.


Jean

You've hit the nail on the head with Glan Conwy, as it happens. Very good portrayal from someone who's never visited. If you want, I can see if I can't get a photo taken of one of the old local cromlechs (stone structures) to throw in a bit of authenticity?

It was cool to see more of the Viking, but the whole 'threatening speech to scare prisoners' doesn't seem that Viking. I don't think the Norse collected skulls either. That was an Irish thing, and a Classical Age Irish thing at that. His dialogue did sound very authentic though. The fanatical hatred of monotheists seems a little odd too. I hope the next time this guy is around, he's swinging his awesome chainsaw-axe in some battle.

There were some good things in here. As always, the whacky technologies were fun to read about, and I loved the crazy Viking berserker. I hope we get more of him. There are still some problems with the odd modern turn of phrase, and I feel that some of the chapters end too soon. I would prefer a more detailed look at the world and the politics, and knowing just who controls what and is at war with who would be helpful. Also, the French seem cartoonishly evil in this. With Napoleon's penis suit and Tallyrand demanding sex from his followers, they seem just too outlandishly villainous to take seriously. You can still make a good nasty Napoleon without dressing him in cock clothes.

This is shaping up to be a very nice series. I like all the crazy Napoleon attacks everywhere, and the undead dino-riding mongols were pretty cool. It does seem to suffer from the same problems that plagued Father of Lights, though. Namely, there's not enough description so I have trouble picturing certain things. The modern ways of writings, referring to children as 'kids' for instance, also takes me out of the fantastic Napoleonic world. Otherwise, I look forward to the next installment.
Thanks,
Michael Panush

Soo COOL!! I love this story and the way you write it. Can't wait for more!

This was a very good opening, and despite your descision not to use period-speak, I think most othe dialogue in this chapter sounded quite authentic. The 'oh shit' bit at the end was a bit off. 'Hell's Bells' or 'Good Lord' would have worked better, but other than that, everything seemed spot-on. I liked the battle, the very cool troops used on all sides, and I look forward to what is going to happen next. Will we see Napoleon cross the channel? And will the British be the good guys in this one? Also, have you ever read the Sharpe series, by Bernard Cornwell? They tell about a comman British redcoat during the Napoleonic war and might give you some good details into how people acted and talked. The 'black hat' you mentioned is a shako, I think.
Anyway, good job and I look forward to reading more.
Thanks,
Michael Panush

An excellent start to something that should be suitably epic, Jave. The only thing I could really ask for is longer chapters.

I totally agree, this is a fantastic story, and a fantastic start. I was hooked immediately and the ending was amazing, so exciting and scary! I'm definately interested in reading more.

Woah, I can't believe this didn't get any reviews yet! This is a truly top teir story. Grammer, plot, action sequences, perfect.

Definetly look forward to updates.