Although it doesn't rhyme (and of course poems don't have to), there's a definite rhythm and flow here. It may be sad, since the narrator is dying, but the way this is written makes it beautiful as well. I like it. -oleander (P.S. Thanks for reviewing me!)

You truly have talent...that's all I can say.

Rain seems to be your inspiration, very nice. I like the third stanza, it kind of reminds me of something I would write :) Write on Mirabella!

~Anna~ ^_^

Lovely descriptions. The repetition is good, and I love the mention of rain, a truly beautiful thing. This is a great poem.

A truly elegant poem, I liked the repetition of its key concepts - rain, the world etc. Set at an easy pace and has a good flow, very enjoyable to read =)
~fleur

The crimson mist of our blood.


You know... i really love that.
It's very visual...