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Isca 2009-04-09 . chapter 2
"I'm a slut." I don't know why, but there's something so comedic about this line, it's hilarious--so honest!
Alice Sleeps 2009-04-08 . chapter 2
Ah, it does indeed. I like the shift to first person, it makes the raw emotion of this poem much more accessible. The bold words are nice touches as well, though I have to say the conclusion disappoints. "If you love me, leave me" is so cliche a way to end something self-derogatory. However, it's a good piece.
Alice Sleeps 2009-04-08 . chapter 1
This seems like a good start to a piece, but I don't know where it's going. Maybe chapter 2 will enlighten me?
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