i think totally-fuzz had some pretty good points
4u. the question here is theme. what is the
point? do not give the whole pledge of allegiance.
and since this is a slam, or slam-like, you must
be more assertive and opinionated. aggressive.
maybe the theme is misperceptions of americans
by foreigners. if so, then you need to shove
their words back down their throats, dig? you
needn't be a jerk abt it; like, i like the good
girl and christianity angle, etc., but don't just
say you respect these values: prove it, and show
no mercy! best of luck.

It's a good start, there are a few areas with typos,but overall it's very inconsistant. Sometimes it sounds like prose, sometimes like poetry, so i think the best course of action is to read it aloud with a pencil handy and make corrections as you go.
Considering the structure, it would be better if you had a argument/counter argument format, rather than a long list of percieved misinformation. that way it will better personify the character of the event, trying to blast away peoples misconceptions, it also creates a sense of challenge. Either way you'll need to play around with it a bit and see which style reads better. Keep the rythhm even, so you have a steady reading pace, play around with sentence length: short-fast, long-slow to change the mood.
Good luck and work hard.

Xx
Fuzz