Not to be rude or anything but maria called jeff "jeffery thompson" instead of " johnson" in her first appearance in this chapter.

I would also like to taste some churros. :-)

Glad jeff is improving in some fields almost had a heart attack in the previous chapter.

Not to be rude or anything but maria called jeff "jeffery thompson" instead of " johnson" in her first appearance in this chapter.

I would also like to taste some churros. :-)

Glad jeff is improving in some fields almost had a heart attack in the previous chapter.

Cant help but respect matts awesome delicate choice of words

Its so sad. i teared up at the end. thinking of the most basic thing in my life held for granted and almost always ignored. love.

Again, very well-written, but why can't I find part one anywhere? None of the links work. :(

You need more reviews. This is really really good. I haven't read the first part so I don't really know what's going on, but you have some very interesting characters. Is Matt schitzophrenic?

I think your Spanish needs work in places but other than that this is perfect.

Keep up the good work!

(Sorry, I'm really crap at portraying my thoughts and feelings in a review... -_-' )

This is quite a good love story, complete with turmoil, & conflict, which always helps. Jeff & Maria's budding relationship is - well, words can't describe it. Great, outstanding? Wonderful? I fell for Jeff in Part 1, bringing in Maria has brought me even closer to the boy. While thus far I prefer Part 1 of "The Boy" with it's high level of drama & emotional shock factor, Part II has been an intriguing show of Jeff's development and Matt's attempts to make him 'normal' despite the horrendous abuse Jeff suffered in Part 1.

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I have a feeling there are developments going on behind the scenes; that is, this is too 'normal' (albeit Jeff is anything but a 'normal' boy). You have a nasty tendency to lull readers - then slap-shock us (or at least me) to a high pitch of emotional swings. I love how Jeff is evolving as he grows older. It seems *very* natural. Its become apparent that he and 'Mister' have evolved a father-son relationship. (I was worried they would become lovers - a no-no in the marketing world since this would make this story a pediophile's paradise.) However :D - I haven't ruled out the "Thornbirds" solution yet! (You do have a wonderful knack of surprising / shocking people - we shall see, shalln't we?)

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As for the writing style: Sentence structure, grammar, and vocabulary indicate a high degre of talent and education; descriptions and characterizations are *very* real. I have trouble believing this this *just* a 'fictional account'. (Are you sure you are not Matt or Jeff? I keep wondering! :D) Great scenery and the plot & characters are developing very nicely. Maria - another intriguing and lovely child. The tie-ins to your earlier work (The Boy) are apparent (eg. memories, etc), but only give a hint to the true horrors in Part 1. I understand the reason - why rehash what has been written? - and it helps to drive the market to your earlier work.

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Given the nature of your writing and this story, I suspect darker times lay ahead. I think adding to Jeffery's internal conflicts would be great, and would reflect his growing into an adult. Maria & Jeff's relationship is great, as well as the continued evolution of the other relationships within this story. Keep up the good work. A wonderful read. I will be back for more! (What can I say: I'm hooked on the characters!)

You are quite talented. Definitely one of the best stories I've read in a while.

Wow. What can I say? At first I thought this story was going to be “light and airy” despite its dire predictions (words I used when reviewing Part One) – but you pull no punches. As of the second or third chapter I knew that, and with this last chapter I can see the storm on the horizon. Which, come to think of it, reminds me of Matt's reoccurring dream – the one with the storm in it, and the two of them walking down the road. There's a lot of symbology in this emotionally evocative tale – in both Part One and Two! – and what started out as 'light and airy' is rapidly becoming 'dark and scary'. Scary in terms of the boy's thoughts and emotions, and what Mister – Matt – is going to do about them. I am beginning to see shadows of Part One in this story, images of Harold (God! What a scary, frightening, twisted man!) reflected in the boy. And THAT'S scary, especially given that he seems to be developing a love interest – and interests in deeper, darker things (I won't tell, not wanting to give the story away to other readers). And then Matt goes and buys (trades?) for a puppy. What's up with that? There's bound to be a tragic end to this; I have no doubt, and am already feeling a bit sorry for the dog. What is Jeff going to put him through? What in the hell is going on with Jeff? His character seems as real as ever, but he's twisted in a way that leaves the mind frightened. And his thoughts about Maria and Olevia – both joyous and terrifying, I'm wondering if its going to be a beautiful ending – or a nightmare. I'm starting to wonder if they are safe around this boy, this tragic child you have brought to life. I'm also wondering: just how sick is this going to be?, while at the same time placing faith in your talent for unusual twists and turns to make everything 'come out right' with beauty and love forever between the abused child and the mentally shattered man.

A suspenseful story, to be sure. I would STONGLY advise any readers to read “Part One” prior to this part, otherwise some of the references may not make sense. I do wish you had led into Part Two with a scene from the truck – perhaps something about them crashing into the Rio Grande, or their struggles thereafter. A little bit better lead in might improve this story – but then again, maybe not. Maybe you left that part out to keep the story from dragging. Just remember, though – it is better to 'show' than it is to 'tell', and while you have told a little about that part, you haven't 'showed' us what happened in the truck after they crashed. It might make for a little bit more interesting – and less abrupt – beginning.

Shocking. Horrifying. Beautiful and repulsive. Emotionally stirring and deeply disturbing. A story of love and pain and angst; of survival and two deeply moving characters which you have successfully (beyond successfully!) brought to life. You seem well on the way to doing it again. And for that I must thank you. A wonderful read thus far, a real adventure in SO many ways – you've got me hooked (just in case you can't tell – I think I must be your most devoted reviewer, sad to say!).