   moonlightwarrior859 2009-11-12 . chapter 1Hello! Let me start off by saying I thoroughly enjoyed the chapter!
Lets cut right to the critisism, but there isn't alot, I asure you. You seem to have a bit of confusion when it comes to the whole 'its' versus 'it's' you may or may not know the difference, so at no offense to your knowledge of the English language, but its is the possesive form, and it's is a contraction of it and is. There were little or no grammatical issues, and on that note, I congratulate you, most authors have several issues with grammar. I did see some small typing errors, but I found that it was easy to read around them, however, you may want to go through with a fine tooth comb and correct the minor things, or, you could have a new set of eyes go through it ^-^ I find that it always helps to have somebody else look through it! You never know what you may have missed that someone else might find!
You did an amazing job with this fiction, and I hope to read your second chapter soon, that is if I find the time :) Also, on a departing note, It would be an honor if you were to read/review my story 'The Call of the Wolf' and you can find it on my profile, if you would like to read it :D |
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