 Moony08 2010-02-07 . chapter 1Nice! I like the line "Their sorrow clouds the heaven with grey"
and "The sword of scars are here to stay"
I like your poems! |
 nikkilittle 2009-09-26 . chapter 1No doubt inspired by Shelley's Ozymandius. A blank verse modern update. Not equal to Shelley, of course, but the feeling makes up the difference. I, certainly, could do no better. |
 Jack O'Leary 2009-04-28 . chapter 1Nice, tidy poem. The meaning is clear, but not overtly. It's hidden behind crafty imagery and clever wording. I'm not partial to the rhyme scheme, but that has more to do with my personal tastes than any problem with the poem. A good poem. |
 HighOnBrokenWings 2009-04-23 . chapter 1Very very pretty, I mean, I dont even usually particualarily like rhyme, but there was something about the kind of unstructuredness of this rhyme scheme that made it great. I really enjoyed this piece! |
 FleeingSoul 2009-04-17 . chapter 1I enjoyed reading this. :) I'm into the whole "end of the world" idea. It's interesting. Well done. |
 jay darque 2009-04-16 . chapter 1dude... brilliant...! |
 Edensong 2009-04-13 . chapter 1"Silk, bones and blood"
Beautiful line!
Thought-provoking and rich in imagery. Keep writing! |
 your infection their plague 2009-04-13 . chapter 1"Broken dreams and the fall of an empire."
I really love that part! But the whole poem was great. I like how it all appears to be one stanza, and how there are repeated parts. I think that really does help the flow of the poem. |