What an interesting piece! I'm not sure about the meaning behind this poem (perhaps the summary is telling me something that I'm missing), but it was very lovely reading material!

"and received a few odd looks from strangers / because she was having the most extraordinary effect upon the bench" - I like that second line (well, third in the poem) a lot; nice word choices there.

"bubblegum-spotted pavement" - Wonderful description!

The conclusion is excellent, the whole poem extremely creative. Fantastic job!

"As if she could share jokes with gravity like this all the time. We watched her for a bit, but she stayed sitting on the ground, eating her walnuts until the packet was empty."

Oh, what a phenomenal ending, I loved every word of it. The girl has a special relationship with gravity--how nouveau! What a delicious, avant-garde piece. :)

-Isca

this is bizarre! like somewhere between a paragraph of prose, and a poem. I really like it. it's a totally obscure image, but you remark on it as an amused passer-by would: un-dramatic, and slick.

I like -
"They looked a shifty pair, the bench and the girl."

"as if she
could share jokes with gravity like this all the time"

"eating her walnuts until the packet was empty."

understated, and rather charming. !!
you are really experimental as a writer; you are far more inventive than I would ever be, it really pays off. You have some lovely pieces. I can't find it now, but one set out like a love letter? I loved that.