Okay. That was a bit of a let down.
It got so good. And then he's gone.
The ending was a bit of a slap in the face. sorry.
I loved the whole story, but i don't know i didn't like how he just *poof* disappeared in the end.
Also, I didn't really find the swearing all that neccessary, it was good in some places but where it's like:
" Oh, great, I was probably in hell. Shit." I guess it just doesn't really belong there. But hey, that's my opinion. Maybe i'll get it better if i keep reading your other stories?

I realy liked this story. your a great writer. i cant wait to read the next one. :)

this was a pretty interesting story :D
i actually finished the whole thing today and i can't wait for the sequel! :)

This is pretty good. I can't wait for the sequel.

This is an interesting story. Caught me almost from the first pragraph. I did notice though that there are some places where words are missing and other places where the sentance should be restructured. Sometimes just rephrased. Either way I really can't wait to read the next chapter hehe keep up the good work :)

Hey, this is really good. I really like the plot line but sometimes it gets a little confusing. Please continue=]]