Oh it's beautiful! :) It flows very well and has lots of good mental images. A very good picture of daydreaming. I think it would be better to be formatted like a poem, on separate lines.

~Swanwhite

I loved the whole idea behind this, and how you incorperated so many different images in such a short wee piece. I love the line...
"wishing for a better life, wishing for the right person"
That is how we all feel while in this sort of daze, I'm sure, and youre writing made me feel as if I was possibly there.