loved it. Nice Job! Keep Writting ;)

I'd love to see this in single-spaces. (Hold shift while pressing enter or backspace to single-space up or down.) I think that would tie in your words together and make the stanzas more apparent.

I think your rhyming in this is really interesting. I don't see many people who rhyme the whole stanza, usually it's abab or abcb. So that was cool. And overall, I liked your rhymes; some of them sounded a little awkward, but mostly very pretty.

Great job! Your imagery was nice, too. It didn't overwhelm, so to say, the rest of the poem.

-Peach, EF RG review!

I love the symbolism in this piece! The meaning is universal and it is written in a form perfect for the piece. I loved it!

wooh!
You improve well
The poem is more meaningful and deep..
keep up the good work
(^_^)