|Reviews for White Rainbow|
| cow 9/25/10 . chapter 1
I like the entire feel of this piece! It feels so heavy yet, it feels so free. I love the use of "tuning an empty guitar', cause
I know how frustrated you get when you tune them ;D. It feels so connected to that feeling where you couldn't get somewhere yet
it's so close, but in this context its an empty one and that expression is so suited!
I also love "you never know where you are until you are too far", the way it rhymes with the first verse gives it such a nice flow and
it's amazing how it gives you that sense of realisation. It gives you a sense were you feel so lost but yet you know where you're supposed to
I love how you used balloons and kites, and the bit where you "released" and "cut the strings" has such a vividness behind it and really
materializes the idea of letting go of something/letting something free. And its followed by "lets paint this rainbow in white", which feels
like "lets start over" and white's one of your favourite colours!
I love the reference to strings again, it feels connected with the empty guitar and balloons, but it feels like severed relationships where you
really waant to repair.
| wo bu ai ni le 1/30/10 . chapter 1
Reminded me of James Morrison's song xD
There are layers of extended metaphors in the poem & I like you you found a common point to all of them. I especially like the last line, where the kite is gone & there is only the souvenir to remind you of things past.
| gone4good 12/31/09 . chapter 1
I think this is your most beautiful poem.
May all your dreams come true. "Duncan"
| a silenced revolution 12/30/09 . chapter 1
emotional and honest.
nice simile with the guitar.
my favourite line is "Let's paint this rainbow in white." visual & conceptually intriguing.
| Aurora Corona 4/24/09 . chapter 1
'Fulfilling those promises is like tuning an empty guitar.'
This line was gorgs :)
omg, you're good at both chinese and english! I'm JEALOUS D:
Srsly, your prose and use of metaphor was awesome, gripping and mesmerising. I applaud to you, future famous poet/author!