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lilylilyrose 2009-04-20 . chapter 1
the imagery in this poem is just amazing.
I love the watery / child-like images, of swimming and bobbing about, hugging, ships... water babies!

"I fell asleep in the bath and you ducked your hands underneath me -
a touch like barnacles hugging a ship – and clotted
your green leathery seaweed pods over my skin
until I dissolved like salt in your arms."

fabulous.

also love; Clementine sky/ burning orange ocean.
it works because you stick to a few images/ colours, and expand on them throughout. not overcrowding at all... in fact, perfect,
Isca 2009-04-18 . chapter 1
"I fell asleep in the bath." Powerful imagery.
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