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Reviews For: Blindfolded
Little girl Big world 2009-10-10 . chapter 1
This is lovely. The rhyming didn't sound forced at all and added nicely to the piece. I like the whole subject matter and the final line was perfect! Well written :)
brunettelitlover 2009-04-19 . chapter 1
Eh... in general, an interesting poem. The image of the blindfold was great, but the ending "let her soul be fed" although it stuck to your rhyming, it seemed a bit lost with the idea. Fed what? Information? Life? Love? Light? Say that.
Aerwiya 2009-04-18 . chapter 1
First I'll start with a little crisicism (but really it's only a personal preferance, you do what you want). I personally think it would add to the poem if you added another four lines before the last four and have them expound on what exactly (or generally) she's hiding. But really that's all I can think of. THIS POEM IS BEAUTIFUL! I like the image it brings to mind and how well it fits with the message of the poem. Great job! Keep up the writing!
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