 brunettelitlover 2009-04-19 . chapter 1I love your title first of all. Second, I read your poem and it went downhill. Your rhythm is all messed up, and I am NOT a fan of list poems. The ending was great though, a little taste of irony. You may want to try some rhymes? Fiddle with the idea of the tin girl a bit more maybe- there's potential. |