I found your story through the Slash Pile and began reading it today. I find the two main characters and the supporting characters to be well written. The main plot and the sub plots are also well thought out.

I have a question though. Will Anaxantis ever forgive his brother?
I understand his reasoning behind the behavior and yes his brother deserved to be punished, but Anaxantis is coming off less wounded hero and more jackass.

Keep writing I look forward to the next chapter.

“Is he for real? Did I hear him say to bring my boyfriend along to impregnate my wife?” lol, loved this. I always wondered how royalty did it. Anaxantis the conqueror will have quite a nice ring to it ^~

This is probably my favorite chapter yet. Stable boys . . . *melts* And I feel really bad for Nulfie - I love him (one of my favorites). He deserves to be happy. Oh and I detest Lorcko's dad, but I am liking him more and more.

I understand your reasoning for looser grammar now - I hadn't thought about it that way. And, again, I wish this was a book . . . I meant that as a compliment in my first comment, it just ended up listed as something I particularly noticed *shrugs*

Wow. I started reading this story last night and I have pretty much read the whole way through with only minor pauses. I am in love with this story!
Things I love in particular:
1. Anaxantis
2. The one-sided conversations between the storyteller and the listener
3. The pages. All of them.
4. The crazy chicken docotor, whose name escapes me
4. The love/hate/mistrust/physical attraction between the brothers
I really was afraid, after your warning in the beginning that this story would just be much too somber for my liking, but I have actually laughed out loud ("The Prince's Hole") and literally cried (when Anaxantis was talking to Hemarchidas about the rape). And I've been surprised by how much I like your characters, even the ones I was dead-set on hating (like Ehandar).
Just a couple (well, three) things I noticed:
1. Sometimes the language seems a little too modern - words like "ok" and "guys" and "jitterbug" (I don't remember where that one is, but I remember seeing it). It's not bad, but it detracts somewhat from the time period feeling.
2. Also, a lot of modern-ish concepts - like good doctors and bathrooms and consistant baths. Again, not bad, but just something I noticed.
3. I really wish this was a book book. It takes so much more concentraction to read a story this complex on the computer.
Anyway, good work, I love it!

this story has scarred me for life. and i can't stand that it's good. it should seriously come with a warning not to do it all in one night. i am spent.

so daddy's getting really worried now. ohohohoho, things are getting good!

I love Anaxantis's mini heroic escapades, his life seems so gloomy otherwise. I wonder if being a teenager compounds his emo-ness.

ohohohoh, what is this blooming between the boys? another lovely chapter. your characters are all beautiful in their own way.

You make it really easy to empathize with the characters. I feel my heart breaking for Hemarchidas, and Arranulf, and Ehandar, and Anaxantis. I feel like you've got me trapped in this world you've created.

oh the foreshadowing! I love this

I think rereading this reminded me why I should hate Ehandar. You set this story up so well.

I've read up to chapter four and this is amazing. thank goodness there are still good writers on FP!

The more I read this, the more I feel sorry for Ehandar, and the more I start to dislike Anaxantis.

I wonder who the traitor could be, I'm a little worried. I'm a little confused, though, if there are pigeons being sent at all, that means that there has to be at least one traitor, yes? Because if there wasn't, there'd be no reason to send a pigeons back because one wouldn't have been sent in the first place?

Anyways, awesome story. I've been reading it for a while, but I haven't reviewed it yet. I figured I should. XD Can't wait for the next chapter.

Wow, with power comes powerful enemies. This suspense you're building just keeps getting better and better. I just wonder what his fall is going to be like, and whether it will be brought by Tenaxos, Ehandar, or himself. This is just getting better and better.

Wow! This was a really well written chapter. I love the the detail put into these scenes, and the evolution of anaxantis is truly fascinating. If I could write characters half as well as you I'd be twice the author I am now. The plot is really getting good, like an intense jenga game. I can't wait for the next block to be removed. I'm so glad Hemarchidas finally made his move, the fanboy in me wanted to see it happen sooner, but you're so good at tantalizing the reader with these things. Please keep writing, It's a truly a joy to continue to come back to this story.

RZ