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Isca 2009-04-20 . chapter 1
"Enshrining a beetle like a hologram." Striking simile.

"How the spider's prey looks like a clod of earth." Absolutely mind-blowing. Wow! :D

"Turn of an eyeball on its axis." Chilling! Philosophical!

"We saw less than we could have done." PROFOUND! :D

Excellent work,
-Isca
lilylilyrose 2009-04-20 . chapter 1
this is quietly beautiful.
and quietly grotesque.
you are very good at inhabiting something small/ the eye...

the way light moves on curved surfaces, enshrining a beetle
like a hologram
- I could eat this.

we see things that cut us more deeply than
the brightest glare.
- this is clever and ripplingly startling. I blinked and read it again.

this is a gorgeous poem.
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