 Sacha B. Sylver 2009-06-25 . chapter 1I'm not big on poetry that doesn't rhyme, so I can't really get the flow of this poem... but your message is poignant, and well articulated. Personally on the line that says "Some faintly" I would type the line as "Some faintly, some loudly--but all sounded" for kind of a dramatic pause effect, to drive home your point. Your words are beautiful and effective, even though I can't pick up on the flow of the words. Thanks for sharing it :) |