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Carbon Footprint
Sercus Kaynine
2009-04-26 . chapter 1
Reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon! *link on profile*
I like the idea of this poem because it's original.
I don't really like your word choices though because a lot of them are obscure and hard to understand.
R. E. Ellison
2009-04-23 . chapter 1
Four syllables? Huh? PER-PET-U-A-TING (five?)
The form is perfect, the subject what is 'accepted' per the ancient rules, and your vocabulary is GREAT.
Plus, for Earth Day, who could ask for more?
Nice!
Moondog Dozier
2009-04-23 . chapter 1
Very visual. The end line works well, especially the use of "gaffe". Good haiku.
LittleLoser.OfTheRebellion
2009-04-22 . chapter 1
the first line had just got four syllables...
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