As is this. The way it goes back and forth, and seems so honest and pleading and wanting is just amazing.

i love the format,

so very awesome.

"i love, love, love you…is that okay?"

is so sweet, so vulnerable, so real.

great job.

I think I commented on DeviantArt that I loved this poem. And I still do love it. :) Great job!

Amazing - I love the words you use and how you use them. :) How do you get the paragraphs to not have space inbetween each line? I've been trying, and I seem to consistently fail.

Your writing has a wonderful girlish whimsicality to it. I could completly feel the emotions that you wanted to display.

It's a strong comparision with the fluid, matter-of-fact stanza's, and the parts that are {} which display a softer, unsure narration. I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.