Perfect, I love the details, keep it up, by the way, I am new here.

Awesome. Amazing. Perfect. Awesome. :P

It's your number one fan. Not so anonymous anymore, used to be 'Nooneoutof theblue' now, i am me. :P Loved it so much. Keep writing. I will be here the whole way through.

Haircut time? Keep it short. Almost like a shaggy army cut, perhaps? Or, ear-length.

Just shouting out. Have fun, continue on.

-Sam-

How many times should I say more?

How about once.

MORE.

I love your writing. :) Continue on!

Awesome twelfe (?) chapter. So, Peter died? Shit. That's really too bad.

So where are the Treo going now? Hmm.

Okay, so can't wait 'till the Thirteenth chapter! Whoo!

-Nooneoutof theblue

My god. You're amazing. And even if no one ever comments much, I'm quite savvy on it.

I will comment every chapter, because i know that there will be more to come.

You are amazing as a writer.

- Your number one fan,

Nooneoutof theblue

You seem to amaze me with every chapter. I am now done chapter ten, and hopeing that you will post more soon enough.

Well done. I love it. :)

Alright. Fingers crossed for chapter eleven!

(Melanie... you've portraiyed that something is fishy about her. Way to go.)

Continue on.

Tt K.

Amazing writing skills. And, i must point this out, i LOVE the Title of the book. It's very, parsay, Diffrent?

I love the book so far! Even if i AM only on chapter Seven. So, i hope you can write more.

Very nice work, you're looking at all the Possibilities, and it seems like your not just 'writing' your writing with your heart and soul. Or, maybe you're just this damn good?

Ooh. That'd be ah-mazing. :)

Alright. Keep going. I love it.

I'm defs a fan. :)

-TT Krause

Good Job. :)

Okay, I like your style, great idea and everything. Just one thing. It's a little bit short...

That was awesome! _ Got me hooked.

There were some grammatical errors, but other than that, great job! I'm looking forward to your next update!

I think that you need to elaborate in some parts. Like, what does Gael look like? Is the time period medieval? How old is the baby? What is Gael's physique?

Just some suggestions. _ I hope you go along with them!

Your fellow writer,

Lucas McDrake _

I got sort of confused. He already has feelings for the slave?

Interesting. I like it so far.