My favorite line:

"on the sidewalk concrete

a curled sack of bones

is crying"

Great imagery in that

and I love the wording.

Although some of the

phrasing is difficult to read

(first stanza)

your word choices were

very descriptive.

Nice job, ;D

There were such vivid images in my mind. It's short and sweet.

Slap yourself for claiming to have no talent. This is brilliant.

People read your stuff.