i really love this one alot.

I like the interjections between the lines of poetry. They add such freedom to your words. It did get too excessive at times, though, like the “ahs” and at the end.

My favorite stanza was definitely the last one. Between the sexual references and the fact that the speaker is clearly drunk, it really exemplifies the concept of the whole piece.

Really fun read. A serious topic of course, but you made it feel so loose and free.

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this is nice you should read my poems XD

You could feel the beckoning throughout the piece; the wanting of one person for another. Great work.

Much love,

Juliet.

again a good song.

Ich hope your are well and you are not waking up with a stranger in your bed (a good line)

I'm trying to imagine what it would sound like if somebody was singing this whole thing and what type of music it would be. So far my imagination is satisfied! Good words you got there, as usual.

"I don't have all the answers,

I don't know what's the question."

I loved that line! The whole song sounded pretty good, I think it would sound especially good with music. Have a nice weekend, including the rest of today! I hope it's sunny and fun! D