I really don't like the format. I'd like it much better in stanzas. It would look cleaner and read easier.

But I love the beginning line. It makes for a great summary and the simile for that is gorgeous. "Silence blooms out of her like a terrible rose." If that was a boy, I'd marry him. :)

And the alliteration for "fickle friend" is nice, too. You had a couple really poetic lines that you threw in here and there that were really great. It helped with the rhythm a lot.

-Peach, from the Review Marathon (link's in the profile!)

Reviewing for the Review Game's Review Marathon! *link on profile*

Once again, fantastic word choice. I love how you used the tongue to demonstrate her annoyance/sickness with talking. It was clever, yet I could easily understand it.

I liked how you posed talking as a bad things, and this sick girl as a blessed one because she is unable to talk. It was the opposite of what most people would think, and gave the poem a nice essence of originality.